[HCoop-Discuss] local advocacy

[David Crawshaw]

I've taken most of these suggestions on, and have arrived at:

http://www.hcoop.net/~crawshaw/hcoop-a4-draft.pdf

And thanks for the png link Beni, it let Safari render a higher
quality logo. Any more thoughts?

d.

2008/4/28 docelic <docelic at mire.hcoop.net>:
> On Mon, Apr 28, 2008 at 12:26:58PM +1000, David Crawshaw wrote:
>  >
>
> > True. I've uploaded a new version, with less text and better points.
>
>  Here are a couple more ideas David, looking at your new PDF:
>
>  1) When you mention AFS, you could say OpenAFS, so that people can
>  specifically look it up on the web.
>
>  2) When you say that the data can be accessed by ssh, webdav and ftp,
>  also say that (with an AFS client) they can access the files as if it
>  was a local directory on their machine. (/afs/hcoop.net/.... )
>
>  3) Also in the first bullet, the second sentence "Host static..." seems
>  awkward because Host appears as a noun, until you figure out it's really
>  a verb. (Solution proposed under point 6.).
>
>  4) Add something like "Fixed" or "Flat" to the second bullet "$5 a month"?
>
>  5) Replace "the co-op keeps it online" with "we keep it online"? (More
>  direct, otherwise it seems like you're a 3rd party advertiser).
>  Also, it could be reworded like "... means you create the content, we
>  keep it online and accessible".
>
>  6) "For power users". Move that to position #2 in the list? That way you
>  can remove the "host static... and run your own daemons" from the first
>  bullet completely, and say that in bullet #2. (Which you already do -
>  you have some redundancy in #1 and #4).
>
>  7) "Custom open source software" sounds a bit strange.. Would something
>  like "Custom-developed open source software" be a little bit better?
>  (Anyone got a better idea?)
>
>  8) Democratic: how about saying (something like):
>  Members are given voting rights and each year elect 3 of 5 Board members
>  to steer the co-op in the upcoming year? (Nathan, adamc: can you phrase
>  it better?). (A link to our official bylaws at http://wiki.hcoop.net/HcoopBylaws
>  could be good if it doesn't take too much space).
>
>  9) Last bullet, "Professional hosting" should be moved to position #4
>  if you've embraced the idea of technical-features-first. The "hosting"
>  should be replaced with "colocation", since that's what Peer1 provides.
>
>
>  Cya,
>
>
> -doc
>
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